Good stuff, BD! :smt023 I like the way it ended. It was much creepier that he didn't end up the hunted one.
Narrated Story This is the audio narration of the story you posted, Tam. See if this makes your body tingle in fear or creepiness... The Portraits
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Not a bad start; just needs a bit of tightening up. Something that I think would make it better would be doing in a more muted tone...like a telling ghost stories around the campfire kind of thing. Also, be careful of your diction...there was a bit of southernness coming out here & there (gettin', clearin', realizin'). Keep playing around with it, and keep an eye out for more stories that inspire you so you can really get into them. :smt023